What America Has to Offer
When an average American student is asked about
his/her thoughts on school and education in the States, the response is usually
“eh, it’s okay,” “I wish we could choose our own classes,” or “there is not
enough freedom.” But among the native American students who were given the
privilege of receiving an American education from birth, there are
international students, students whose families immigrated to the United
States, envisioning the same dreams as the ones who sailed the Atlantic two
hundred years ago and saw the Statue of Liberty calling out the hopes of freedom
and success.
So why is there a massive influx of immigrants,
predominantly students, to the United States of America? Could this
contradiction between the American student’s answer and the hopes of
international students be a difference between dream and reality?
Most people come to the United States for
education and, simply, for a better life. At the expense of becoming the
minority of a foreign country and taking on low-income jobs, people from all
over the world make sacrifices in order to start a new life in America. Students
are often separated from their families to join other students in costly
boarding schools, and for families that cannot afford the extravagant education
for their children, the entire family makes a bold decision to move and start
anew.
The great immigration wave is entrenched in the
idea that America is different. It is different in what it can offer, whether
that is education, business, or pursuit of the arts. Interestingly, many
prestigious schools are filled with Chinese, Indian, and Korean students,
alongside American students. Professional jobs based on education and expertise
are comparatively more respected in the U.S. than those in the home countries
of the immigrants. That is the American dream: the land of America promises a
bright future, better jobs, interactions with intellectuals on a global-scale,
and readily available education system and facilities.
However, is the supposed American dream true?
In some ways, yes. Compared to other European
and Asian countries, America is more open in general. Jeong Hang-Hwa, mother of
two kids, immigrated to the United States in 2004. She had moved mainly for the
education, but also for her son who is diagnosed with ADHD. “I admired the American education
system,” she said firmly, “which was unlike the competition-oriented system in
Korea that put too much stress on me and my kids. As for my son, teachers in
Korea always used to scold him for his impulsive behavior. But when I came to
America, his teacher and counselors created a special committee solely focused
on creating a new system of learning for students like my son. I was deeply
moved.” In another case, Korean Congresswoman, Mrs. Na, sent her son diagnosed
with cerebral palsy to the States. In Korea, she realized her handicapped son
was a victim to humiliation and discrimination, so she sent her son where she
knew he would be looked upon as different, but not inferior. In America, she
knew his son could live in a more welcoming environment.
Mr. Ahn (52), was attracted to a different aspect of
America—its values and emphasis on pursuit of happiness. Mr. Ahn was a
professor at an engineering school in his home country who eventually abandoned
his comfortable life to start a small business in the States. He was
disappointed in the way financial success in Asia was only guaranteed to those
who worked in the big industries, such as Samsung and LG. He had a desire to
pursue a life in America where creativity was valued.
Yet the American dream does not guarantee
success for everybody. Highly educated or people from the upper/middle-class might
have a greater shot at the fulfillment of their dreams, but for the lower
class, success does not come free. Unemployment and adults working 3-D jobs
(dirty, dangerous, demeaning) is often the scenario for the lower class immigrant
families. In reality, America’s promises could just be a on the other side of a
glass window for some people, visible but unattainable.
Julia, really nice job with this piece. The student demographic is always an interesting one, because students can be of any ethnic or economic background. The last paragraph confused me a little because I wasn't clear on the sentence that started 'Highly educated or people...' Also, you didn't mention those 3 D's anywhere in the body of your piece, and that would be interesting to hear about. This piece also sort of answers a couple other of the essential questions, which I find really creative.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your piece, Julia. In my opinion, school and work are important parts of America's attractiveness and using it in your paper was very effective. I agree with Josh - the 3 D's are kind of just thrown in there at the end with little description or explanation. It would be nice if you could elaborate more on it. Your last sentence, especially the imagery you used, was a great way to summarize your piece. I do have one question though. Did you intend for this piece to be informative or argumentative? I could see it as being either and it would be interesting to see which you planned it out to be.
ReplyDeleteI really loved your essay Julia, not only because it gave a new light to the way I look at our educational system, but also because it gave more of an insight into your opinions that you mentioned briefly during a class discussion. Before your comment in class, I viewed the American education system as many of our classmates do, deteriorating, as society tells us it is, as arts and other important departments are receiving less and less federal and state funding. Your writing gave me an insight into American immigrants that made me rethink my view the privileged education I am already receiving and too commonly criticize.
ReplyDeleteI found your piece really interesting for several reasons. First, the use of contemporary issues that affect students, as described by Josh and Caitlyn, really make me want to read about the piece and learn about this point of view on American Exceptionalism. Second, the point of view of the immigrants really hits home the idea that there are still a lot of people who see America as exceptional. Finally, the use of specific examples of real-life people gives the essay a more personal feel. I think that your essay is supposed to be informative, but, like Caitlyn said, I'm not really sure, since the first paragraph seems like it could work for either an introduction or a counterclaim. Also, I think you might want to expand more on the idea of the negatives of America which you started in the last paragraph. Overall, I think you have an excellent and well-researched essay!
ReplyDeleteThis essay strongly conveyed your point through clear and specific examples of experiences different people have had with the American system. I think it’s interesting to bring in how people from foreign countries view our education system and cultural beliefs – many essays only focus on how Americans view themselves. The point that you made about other countries being too competitive and discriminatory is also relatable for many whose parents or who have personally undergone that kind of difficulty. However, like Sam said, I think the cons of American were starting to form, but they weren't clearly elucidated. I think putting an example there would have really helped your piece!
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