Monday, October 22, 2012

What about all of the oppressed minorities in the US? How do these minorities bear on the notion of American exceptionalism?


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What about all of the oppressed minorities in the US? How do these minorities bear on the notion of American exceptionalism?


When I was younger, I loved the stories my grandmother told me about my ancestors. Every night at exactly nine o’clock sharp, I would change into my pajamas, my chubby 5-year old fingers struggling with the buttons, and climb into bed. There I would wait, bright-eyed, until Grandmother creaked her way into my room and tucked me in with my special quilt. The quilt, passed down for generations, told the story of my Cherokee ancestors, embroidered by each owner with intricate images of our people’s stories and lives.
Grandmother would sit in her rocking chair, knitting quietly, and tell me a story about one of the many images on the quilt. As she knit, her soft, velvet voice would delight me with tales of the cunning trickster rabbit’s mischief or the Yunwi Tsunsdi’, the benevolent little dwarves who used their magic to help humans. In my dreams, I danced with the horned serpent-like Uktena and rode the Tlawuna up to the moon, my hands wrapped tightly around its feathered neck.
However, as I got older, the stories became less of the mystical creatures of Cherokee legends, and Grandmother would point her withered fingers at the gory black and red images on the quilt. Her tales evolved into stories of bloodshed and war, about how the pale-skinned foreigners exterminated our people and took over our beautiful land, stripping us of our rights. Long periods of conflict were dotted by times of temporary relief of peace, only to explode in conflict again when metal clashed on metal as my ancestors sought to defend their precious homeland from these pale-skinned invaders. In the end, the Europeans were too powerful and drove my ancestors off their own land, and claiming right to Cherokee lands that had been in our possession long before their first arrival.
The one tale I remember most vividly was the story of the Trail of Tears. When I was 12, Grandmother folded her aged hands and told me of Nu na da ul tsun y, “The Place Where They Cried”. Real tears glittered in her eyes as she spoke about how our ancestors were forced to march away from our beloved homeland into unknown lands in the West. I remember tears streaming down my own face as I closed my eyes, creating two of my own trails of tears down my cheeks. The tears increased as I closed my eyes, imagining the fear and sadness my ancestors felt when forced out of their home. Grandmother had cradled me in her warm embrace, whispering “Nigohilvi, dear granddaughter, do not cry.” I had clung to her, sobbing, racked with emotion as if I were walking the Trail of Tears myself, facing starvation, exposure, and disease everywhere I turned. “Tsi ge yu,” Grandmother had whispered, before leaving the room.
“I love you too, Elisi,” I had whispered back.

I had not understood the importance of my quilt before, but hearing Grandmother tell tale after tale of how my ancestors were oppressed led to my understanding. This quilt was a testament; a testament to my ancestor’s attempts to defend themselves from the men who called themselves “American”. The quilt was a patchwork of memories, stitched together by the blood and tears my ancestors shed for their homeland. The strong lining was made of the strength of my ancestors as they resisted European oppression and each stitch was another step backwards as the Europeans pressed them further from their lands.

That day, I became hardened. No longer was America the land of the free and equal where life and liberty were valued above all else. Everywhere I looked, I could see the faces of the descendants of those that brutally oppressed my ancestors. And even now, they are still oppressing us.  Americans now are just as guilty as the crimes of their forefathers, making it so very difficult for us to find jobs and to find a place in American society as free and equal citizens. We are treated like outsiders in our own land, despite the fact that our people lived on this land long before the Americans. Compared to hundreds of years before, only about 56,000 acres of our original homeland remains, referred to as the Cherokee Indian Reservation, in western North Carolina. The population of our people has dwindled drastically and most now live in the Indian reservations or in small scattered communities in various cities.

This land is my home. It is my native land. It is where my ancestors hunted for their food, surviving off the bare necessities and relying on nature to provide for them. But I look around today and see so many more of the descendants of those who snatched my land from my ancestors and brutally oppressed them. And even today, the oppression continues. America is not the “land of liberty”, it is the land deeply stained by bloodshed and oppression.

6 comments:

  1. Though this is a fictional story, it has the strength of a non-fiction argumentative essay. The choice of expressing minority oppression using Cherokee characters provides a powerful, fresh point of view on American exceptionalism. By recounting the main character’s anecdote of listening to her grandmother’s quilt stories as a child, you create an excellent transition into your stance on American oppression towards minorities. There is also a sense of loss of innocence, as the main character hears the war stories, which further adds to the pathos of the piece. One area to improve is the focus of your essay, particularly in the beginning of the story. Perhaps add some more of your view on American exceptionalism.

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  2. I was under the impression that this was an informative essay, and not a piece of fiction. It is a powerful piece either way, but I (and I imagine others) would appreciate clarification on this.

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  3. This is a great piece. I appreciated how you clearly did some research, using Native American terms and stories made it seem really genuine and more powerful. It was a great idea to take the stance of this particular culture. What the colonists and our country has done to the native people of American land is still something that we're ashamed of, and something I think a lot of people would like to just pretend didn't happen. It's very powerful to remind them through the eyes of a modern child that the culture is still hurting. There were only a couple of awkward phrases I picked up on ("exactly nine o'clock sharp" is redundant, "I became hardened" seems passive... just little things) but overall you really succeeded in making the reader feel something (guilt, sympathy, etc) that could make them change their views on exceptionalism.

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  4. I really enjoyed reading this story. As Fiona mentioned, your research of Native American language and culture added a much more realistic feel and made the story become even more meaningful and authentic. I really admire that you focused on such a small minority, and you also did a great job developing the story of her ancestors through her quilt, which is a unique touch that ties all parts of the story together. Your last paragraph is a particularly strong way of closing- calling America a land "stained by bloodshed and oppression" powerfully concludes the Native Americans' perspectives according to this story. The only sentence that was a little confusing was the last sentence of the third paragraph ("In the end, the Europeans were too powerful...long before their first arrival"), where I think you may have meant "claimed" instead of "claiming" otherwise the sentence is a little unclear. But overall this is a really strong piece that can definitely influence our views on American exceptionalism. Great job!

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  5. Truly compelling story. I especially adore how you made this informative/fictional story seem so real by adding examples of the Native American language. It demonstrates that you spent the time to research another culture and integrate it into your writing. Another part that I really admire is how you smoothly transitioned from childish innocence to the loss of said innocence by keeping the overarching theme of the quilt stories. Despite its relatively short length, I had developed a sense of sympathy for the little girl and her family by the end of the story. You also did a great job with the last two paragraphs. "This land is my home. It is my native land." These two lines deeply resonate with me and it was a good decision on your behalf to make them shorter in comparison to most sentences in your story. In general, I enjoyed this greatly and I really admire you for how quickly you made me care for your characters!

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  6. I enjoyed reading this piece and was captivated by it. I would like to commend you on the fact that it is simply believable. It is clear that you did research on the Cherokees’ and this paid off, adding an element to your story that is unique. You displayed your strong writing skills through your ability to make the reader feel empathy for the Cherokee’s regardless of if they have a personal connection with them. This piece is organized in a straightforward way that is effective and clear. Some critique I have is: the sentence, “see so many more of the descendants of those who snatched my land from my ancestors and brutally oppressed them” is a bit redundant because you state it in both the second to last and concluding paragraphs’, so I would cut out or rephrase one of them. I would also love it if you could provide an example of how “the oppression continues” today, since you state that it does in the last paragraph. It would add a more specific and even more believable element to the story. I would also appreciate it if you added some background information on the girl, for example if she is treated differently because of her ethnicity etc. Overall this is a wonderful piece!

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