Kasey Lakin How
have other countries impacted America/ Is America exceptional?
America is often called the
"melting pot" because of diversity of all sorts. This aspect of
America is what sets it above the rest of the world. America is correctly
considered exceptional because it is made up of bits and pieces of other
countries. As a fairly new country, America was able to learn from the mistakes
of existing cultures while taking the positives and adopting them as their own
ways. Socially and in terms of government, America is made up of the best
qualities.
From the start of its history,
America has been using parts of foreign governments to build their own. When
America was separating from England to become an independent country, the
founding fathers picked and choosed what they liked from the English and from other
cultures ways. They learned from their mistreatment as an English colony that
heavily taxing citizens while giving them little representation does not
work. America knew they did not want to be a monarchy, like England was,
because they wanted more voice for the people, rather than have the King make
all the decisions. Thus they looked outwardly to the government styles of
Ancient Greece and Rome, who had been successful many years earlier as a direct
democracy and a republic. America decided to take elements of each form and
become a representative democracy, a form of government where elected leaders
represent a group of common people. Despite this bitterness of England, America
still admired their government in some ways. The U.S Constitution, written in
1787, is influenced partially by English documents: The Magna Carta (1215) that
limits absolute power of the monarch, The Petition of Right (1628) which gives
commoners a sort of voice, and the English Bill of Rights (1688) which extends
the rights of the citizen. All these documents are contributors to the American
basis, and provide government ideas that are still prevalent today. These
aspects of government have withheld through time and have helped America
succeed. Learning from other countries failures and accomplishments has made
the American government exceptional.
The freedoms given to the citizens
of America are one of the most exceptional qualities America holds. These ideas
of religious intolerance and equality came from learning and building off other
countries. America began with the Pilgrims, coming to the new world to escape
the persecution they faced in England for their Puritan (or Protestant) rather than
Catholic views. Since the Protestant Reformation in 1517, Christianity has continually
divided into sectors due to different ideas and interpretations of the bible.
With these new ideas came major disputes between the existing Roman Catholic
Church and the new Protestants in European countries. In France from 1562 to
1598, there was so much fighting between the French Catholics and the Huguenots
(Protestants) that the period was called the French Wars of Religion. In
England, between the ruling of Henry VIII and the rulings of his children,
Edward VI, Mary, and Elizabeth, what religion was accepted and which was
persecuted went back and forth. This confusion ultimately led to the English
Civil War from 1642 to 1651. Breaking off from the chaos in Europe and starting
new was the idea behind coming to America, and it continued as America grew
independent. Looking at past mistakes, the framers of the Constitution feared
the turmoil caused by religious differences and decided that America would be a
secular nation, where there would be separation of church and state. Along with
being tolerated for their beliefs, Americans are also considered equal despite
any differences. Most of America’s ideas of equality root from the
Enlightenment thinkers of Europe. Englishmen John Locke believed in "Life,
Liberty, and the Pursuit of Happiness", words placed right into the
Constitution. Jean Jacques Rousseau of France believed that all men are
born free and deserve the same natural freedoms. These concepts were known well
by Thomas Jefferson and George Washington, and helped them form America's
principles in the Declaration of Independence and the Constitution. Still to
this day, minorities come to America in search for the same freedom and
equality that the Pilgrims sought out for. But today they come to a society
ready to give them what they deserve.
Competing against countries that
have lasted for centuries is an advantage for America. Americans have used
their knowledge of the past to take what works and exclude what makes countries
fall apart. Mixing policies and ideas from across the world, the United States
has formed an exceptional country.
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ReplyDeleteAt first I was not at all convinced that we (US) have only taken the positives of other cultures. But, even though I personally still disagree, your very convincing argument made it very difficult for me to continue to disagree. Although your supportive evidence along with your claims were a bit disorganized, you got your point across well. Your essay is chock full of evidence to support your argument but it does not have any counter-claims. Not having counter-claims does not hurt your essay but if you did have them I think it would have made your argument even clearer. I do not think that America only took the positives of other cultures. That being said, you are right that America did take the policies and ideas from other cultures that they wanted for forming their government. I think there is a very large difference between the ideas and believes we chose to take from other cultures and the cultures that were brought into our country over the years (immigrants). Overall good job!
ReplyDeleteKasey (with a K!), I love how you decided to tackle two questions in one essay and how you blended them together throughout your piece. Your piece was very informative about different aspects of our society that were borrowed from others, and explanatory of the original ideas that America borrowed. This may be asking for a lot, because your examples were very well researched and perfect to support your ideas, but I wish you had continued on with some other less known ideas that America has borrowed from other cultures and governments. I feel like addition of lesser known borrowed ideas would completely blow away the reader, helping them to rethink the uniqueness of the American culture that is so taken for granted. Although very to the point, your concluding paragraph was a little short as well. Other than that, I loved the idea and execution of your essay! It was interesting to read and obviously well-informed.
ReplyDeleteKasey, great essay! I found your argument clear and easy to understand despite not completely agreeing with it at first like Sam. I do, however, have a nitpicky criticism - in your introductory paragraph, you could be a little more specific to let the reader know that the rest of the essay will be about the aspects of America's government that come from other countries. Though you do mention that it's "in terms of government", I think that instead of simply saying "best qualities", you could mention a few specific qualities to introduce what you will be arguing. Other than that, great use of evidence and interesting argument!
ReplyDeleteYour essay was enjoyable to read, which is usually harder to do with an argumentative piece packed with historical references. At first, I thought that your piece was going to lack originality because there was already a piece done about the positive impact on America by other countries, but your extensive use of history really made your paper unique and completely different from the other one. After reading your essay, your stance on the topic was very clear, but I got a bit lost in the body paragraphs because the plethora of factual information. Your abundant evidence does strengthen your thesis, and like Sam said, you did a great job for not having a counterargument, but I felt it was slightly disorganized. I also agree with Diana in regards to your thesis; I think you should mention a few specifics in the introduction paragraph to get your reader prepared and focused in on what you talk about in your body paragraphs. There was also a small wording error that stuck out to me in the second body paragraph: "In England... what religion was accepted and which was persecuted went back and forth". I know it's really picky, but I think the sentence should be phrased without the use of "what". Maybe you could reword it and say something like "The accepted and persecuted religions in England under so and so went back and forth", just to clean up the awkwardness of the phrasing. Overall, I think you did a great job for picking a more challenging approach to answering the prompt.
ReplyDeleteGood job with the informative piece, Kasey! There was a lot of evidence, but I think you lacked the analysis part. There doesn't seem to be a very clear link between the evidence and the conclusion that America is exceptional. Exploring how those bits and pieces of the past and failures contribute to America today would have also made your argument stronger. How can you prove that those American ideals exist today? Is it possible to show that the evidence you provided were the reasons why America "has lasted for centuries?" I liked how you approached the question not only from the usual economic and political perspectives, but also from the ideas of American values, such as freedom. Overall, very well done with the research; yet, your argument would have been more effective with more analysis on your part.
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