Christine Sim
The United
States of America is constantly revered for its exceptionalism, when in fact; America
has a number of flaws that make it as exceptional as any other country. America
falls behind many other nations in departments such as education and health.
The mere belief of American exceptionalism itself undermines the idea of its singularity,
as nationalism is prevalent in any country. Furthermore, the U.S.A. has become
a target of abhorrence for other nations due to its widely conceited and
unworldly citizens. America may have been unique in the past, but today, the
U.S. does not have any particularly exceptional qualities that place it above
other countries.
Despite America’s
self-proclaimed excellence, the U.S. is severely lacking in education and
health care. When it comes to nation-wide education, Canada comes in at first
place, while the United States hovers at fourth. The literacy rate in the U.S.
falls behind those in North Korea and Cuba, and most high school students in
the states receive mediocre test scores in comparison to many European and
Asian students. Additionally, sky-high costs for American universities plunge
many families into debt. In regards to health care, the U.S. spends more money
on health care than any other country in the world. Regrettably, it fails to give a fair medium
ground to its largely unhappy citizens, as the system is based on profit. As a result, the number of Americans without
health care continues to climb each year. America also comes in thirty-eighth
place for life expectancy and 173rd in infant mortality. America
only manages to come in first place with the highest obesity rate in the world:
a staggering thirty percent.
Another reason why
America is no more exceptional than other countries is the fact that it is nationalistic. American exceptionalism is simply a belief that the
U.S. is distinguished and superior to other nations. However, such a mindset is
extremely common among many different countries, and each country prizes its
own achievements. For example, the British believed that it was their
responsibility to take up the “White Man’s Burden”, and that they were helping
inferior nations through colonization and imperialization. American
exceptionalism is no different from British exceptionalism, or even Chinese
exceptionalism. China has faced an economic boom that has put it in economic
superiority over America, and it has always been the dominant Asian superpower
throughout history. Nationalism is prevalent in any country. Rather than making
it unique, America’s strong patriotism makes it all the more similar to other developed
nations.
Today, the U.S. has
become the focus of hatred for many countries around the world. The reason for
this is due to many Americans’ lack of knowledge about other cultures and their
general hubris. Many students in other countries are proficient in English as a
result of mandatory teaching, while many American students are unfamiliar with
simple grammar rules. Despite the fact that America’s population is composed of
immigrants, the passage of time has allowed newer generations to develop and
grow away from their traditional roots. Consequently, the U.S. has deteriorated
into an overly-prideful nation. American hubris has also led to prolonged war
efforts, such as those in the Vietnam War or the War on Terror. The growing
ignorance and arrogance of many Americans has put the U.S. in a position where disapproval
by other countries is inevitable.
Although America is currently
falling behind the advances of other nations, the idea of American
exceptionalism would not exist if it had not been unique at one point in time. America
is a country where people come in search of religious freedom, economic
opportunities, and the chance to make their dreams a reality. America can certainly
be considered unique in certain aspects, and those accomplishments should
surely be celebrated. However, all countries take pride in their achievements,
and the U.S. does so fervently, though it is lacking in both health and
education. Furthermore, newer generations have swayed from their once
traditional stems, causing many current American citizens to be unfamiliar with
other cultures. The pompous demeanor of most Americans has deteriorated the
nation into a largely disliked country. The various flaws of the United States
of America make the country just as common as any other nation in the world.
This essay was extremely well-crafted and plenty of detailed and well-researched evidence to support it. The analysis about America being all the more similar to other nations because of its nationalistic pride is a clear, persuasive part of the essay. Great job with providing a variety of perspectives on American exceptionalism as well. I think you covered a lot of America- the economy, health, and culture without it just being fact after fact in succession. The integration of each piece of evidence was really well-done! Overall, you really hit each point hard and really made the reader think about the points you were making.
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DeleteI liked how you provided factual evidence and statistics to prove your point. It would be nice if you could provide a more concrete definition of what you believe “exceptionalism” is—is it being first in everything, including education and health? Is it being perfect and well-liked by all other countries? True, many American citizens are probably biased in thinking that their own country is exceptional, but as you mentioned, shouldn’t America’s accomplishments and its overall intentions of liberty and equality be accredited? Exceptionalism could also mean that the country serves as a model; the “American dream” and America’s influence on other countries is undeniable. Maybe you could also provide the opposing viewpoint and state why you believe it is not as convincing as your argument. Overall, great work!
ReplyDeleteIt seems that in class people have mostly talked about America as an exceptional country, so I'm glad you chose a different approach to the topic. The language you used to prove your points was very strong and convincing; words like "staggering" and "plunge". The research you did was evident and really supported your points, which were already strong and diverse. The last paragraph that addresses other opinions is also effective in proving your point. You did a great job on this essay!
ReplyDeleteYou definitely have a lot of evidence and statistics to back up your argument, and you argue your point very well. The structure of your writing is also very neat and easy to follow, with a strong introduction and a conclusion that wraps everything up neatly. Your tone is very aggressive and opinionated, which could have impacted your writing negatively; however, you back each point up so well that it actually makes your writing stronger. Well done! Also, I agree with Julia about possibly including some points about America that are good, and highlight the benefits of America. You could provide a counterclaim and then state why you believe that your claims are more important. All in all, this is a very strong essay and I got a very clear message on your view of American exceptionalism.
ReplyDeleteYour essay is very good at backing up your opinions and claims with warrants. Just by reading the second paragraph, it is very clear that you have done your research, and the statistics alone are very persuasive. It is interesting when you compare exceptionalism to nationalism to the “white man’s burden”. One issue: I don’t exactly know what this sentence means “The mere belief of American exceptionalism itself undermines the idea of its singularity, as nationalism is prevalent in any country.”
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