Sam Lehn
Is
America Exceptional?
The United States was founded on the rights of life,
liberty, and the pursuit of happiness, as stated in the Declaration of
Independence. These rights, combined with the establishment of governments to
guarantee those rights, contain the principles that the US was founded on. America
is exceptional because it is a nation based on the rights of the people,
creating a fair justice system, freedom for the individual, and a fair way to
elect leadership in the government.
One might argue that the US is not exceptional. One could
argue that the justice system is not always fair and the government does not
always follow the justice system and due process. An example of this is the
true story of Abdulrahman
Zeitoun, a Syrian-American who, after surviving Hurricane Katrina, was captured
by the US military and jailed in several different locations without being
given a trial. One could argue that not all inhabitants of the
US are given equal rights such as African Americans before the Civil War and
Japanese-American citizens put in detention camps during WWII. One could also
argue that the way of electing leaders in the US government is flawed because
sometimes people are elected because of propaganda and connections. While the
US is not perfect, and its principles and ideas are not reached 100% of the
time, the US does strive to protect the rights of its citizens.
The
justice system of the US is not perfect, however it is better than in countries
such as China where people are routinely unfairly jailed by their government.
An example of the mistreatment of one’s rights is in the case of Chen
Guangcheng, a
Chinese civil rights activist who worked on human rights
issues in rural areas of China. To suppress the petition for civil rights
change, the Chinese government attempted to lock Guangcheng away by convicting
him for “intentionally damaging property”, and “gathering crowds to undermine
traffic order”, two false convictions that put Guangcheng in
jail. The US Bill of Rights states specific rights that each person is
guaranteed. These rights are so much a part of the principles of the US that
they are repeated as the first 10 amendments of the Constitution. The fifth, sixth
and eighth amendments of the Bill of Rights pertain to the justice system and contain
provisions concerning prosecution, the right to a speedy, public, and impartial
trial with a defense counsel, the right to cross-examine witnesses and the right
to no cruel or unusual punishments. In the US courts, people are innocent until
proven guilty. Following the saying of English jurist William
Blackstone, “It is better and more satisfactory to acquit a thousand
guilty persons than to put a single innocent one to death”. By basing the justice system on the rights of
the people, the US created a fair way to treat people and a way the US can
strive for fairness for all. The Constitution gives people in the US the
freedom to be individuals, and express their own beliefs. Not all people were
given the rights stated in the Constitution at first, but this changed as time
passed. After the Civil War, African Americans were given freedom as citizens
through Amendments 13. Amendment 15, established in 1870, prohibiting the denial of suffrage based on race, color, or previous
condition of servitude. The US government took steps to promote the
rights of minorities in the US. In 1954, “the Supreme Court ordered the desegregation of schools”
(http://www.nola.com). Then in 1960, a 6 year old African American girl named Ruby Bridges
was “escorted to and from William Frantz Elementary by deputy U.S. marshals” (http://www.nola.com) to protect her from the segregationist protesters. The
road to equality is a process, and because of the rights given to the people in
the US, we are able to make changes necessary to strive for the equality of
all.
The elections for office in the US have created a
government of officials based on the will of the people. In the US, citizens
choose the leaders of government through elections so that their opinions and
beliefs can be brought to where they can make a change. In this process, all
citizens of the US get a say in the government, unlike in countries such as
North Korea where dictators decide the fate of the nation. In North Korea, the
position of ruler is passed down through heredity, giving the people no say in
the government. After Kim Jong-Il, dictator of North Korea, died, his “chosen successor, his
youngest son, Kim Jong-un, was in charge” (NYtimes). In the US, the Electoral
College was established in the constitution to make sure the elections stayed
in the hands of the public. During the Constitutional Convention, the Great Compromise
was created, which established fair representation for each state in the
federal government. In 1951, Amendment
22 was passed which limited the president to two elected terms, or a maximum of
10 years. These laws, based on the rights of the public, give US citizens the
opportunity to play a role in the government. Although the US is not perfect,
the rights it is based on give its people the ability to defend themselves,
express their opinions, and have a role in government. The US is exceptional because
it is based on the principles of providing its people with the ideals of life,
liberty, and the pursuit of happiness, and providing a strong government to
help ensure those rights.
The essay is very convincing and there's a lot of evidence to support your clear thesis. I could see that you tried to focus on how America is fair for all of its citizens, and that it is this fairness which makes America exceptional by comparing it to other countries. The specificity of your evidence in the third paragraph is nice. I liked the quotation from William Blackstone which was effective in getting your point across that the American justice system is much more fair than that of the Chinese. However, your first bits of evidence about Zeitoun and the Japanese-American detention camps were not as specific, so the counterclaim was not articulated as well. If you could make those pieces of evidence more specific then the rest of your essay might be more convincing. The third paragraph is really long, and I think it's supposed to be two ideas; the justice system and freedom for the individual. Overall, your argumentative essay is really well structured and well written with a lot of good evidence to support your claims.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Samuel - your use of evidence made your argument seem convincing and well-researched. I especially like how you mentioned Zeitoun since we all read it last year. However, your second paragraph could be a lot stronger. I'm not sure how it's supposed to fit into the whole essay because you touch upon some things, like Zeitoun, and then do not elaborate upon them later. Your third paragraph, on the other hand, is quite compelling - the last couple sentences talking about Ruby Bridges are especially astounding to me and supported your argument well. Overall very informative essay!
ReplyDeleteSam my man, great essay - it is very evidenced and convincing. You address Zeitoun and other instances of oppression in relation to your counterclaim - I feel like this gives the counterclaim a strong evidenced idea that it doesn't deserve in an essay like this. You should referrence your counterclaim, provide a small example, and disprove that example in the face of your claim (i.e. reference Zeitoun later). The argument that you present in the third paragraph is strong - that the US was founded on basic principals of freedom and equality for all. I'd expand on this point - prove that establishing things like the Bill of Rights gives the US special qualities that makes it exceptional; for example, many other democracies followed our example for rights and constitutions. If you discuss the impact of the issues that you address in this essay it makes your basic arguments much stronger - with the electoral college, you could expand further and say that this power that the people are entrusted with is unique and should be a universal right and spread worldwide with the US' foreign policy of spreading democracy. Overall great job!
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