Monday, October 29, 2012

What about all of the oppressed minorities in the US? How do these minorities bear on the notion of American exceptionalism?




Marquis waited in eager anticipation for the director to read the cast list. The director stood in the middle of the dimly lit stage, surrounded by a circle of a hundred or so aspiring actors. Much to Marquis’s annoyance, the director started with the never-ending list of smaller roles. Name after name rolled off his tongue. Each name was accompanied with a shriek of delight and a hug for the director. Eventually the list came to an end, and the director began to read the assignments for the main roles. At this point, there were about ten actors left on the stage. Only five actors would receive a main role. Those who did not get called were effectively cut from the production.
Marquis surveyed the remaining actors. They were huddled in a loose circle around the director. Some of the actors were fidgeting nervously; others listened intently at each prophetic word that came out of the director’s mouth. Keith stood slightly removed from the group, running a few fingers through his silky gold hair, seemingly bored by the whole casting ordeal. For a second, Keith’s electric blue eyes met Marquis’s and a mutual feeling of resentment passed between them. Throughout the auditions an enmity had developed between the two.
Keith was NOT a good actor. He couldn’t memorize lines and he certainly couldn’t deliver them with proper emotion. To make up for his lack of skill, Keith tossed his golden mane back and forth, flashed a charming smile or two, and pouted his beautiful blue eyes. With thick black curls, dull brown eyes, and mahogany-colored skin, Marquis couldn’t simply rely on charm to act. Instead Marquis acted with a professional charisma, unmatched by any other actor at the audition. Time after time, fellow actors would express their amazement at his talent. Even the director would praise Marquis’s performances.
Yet, during auditions, Marquis was always cast as the secondary role, while Keith took the lead. Now that the final cuts were being made, Marquis did not expect anything different. The director read out the assignments, and inevitably, Keith was designated as the lead. Marquis waited for his own name to be called as the supporting role, but was shocked when the director announced that the list had come to end. Marquis stood completely still, arms limp at his sides. His name had not been called at all. Marquis looked at the director for an explanation, but the director was busy talking to somebody else. The lights of the stage glared in Marquis’s eyes, blurring his vision; the temperature in the theatre rose a couple of degrees. Marquis felt a hand on his shoulder. Turning around, he looked into the mocking eyes of Keith.
“Congratulations” said Keith.
Marquis’s hands started to tremble as anger welled in his chest. Without thinking, Marquis swung one fist at Keith’s smug face. The impact left Keith clutching his face on the ground. Everybody in the theatre stopped, shifting their attention to Marquis.
Marquis didn’t care, he kept walking. He walked straight out of the theatre exit, into the city streets. He was going home, away from these sickening people. Behind him the director pleaded “Marquis come back, you don’t understand. Let me explain...”. Marquis didn’t take heed; the words were meaningless echoes in his head.
Outside, it was a cold autumn afternoon. The sky was covered by a thin coating of grey clouds. Behind the clouds, the sun shone lightly. Occasionally, a breeze would whistle through the air, piercing through Marquis’s skimpy sweatshirt. Marquis did not notice, he continued to walk towards his house, thinking about the recent events. It was because he was black. He was the only black actor in the entire production. Of course they wanted to cut him. As he walked, the quality of the neighborhoods continued to worsen. The luxurious, modern storefronts of the city were replaced with ramshackle convenient stores, squeezed together in a crowded mess. On the street corner, a circle of hooded black teenagers huddled around something. One teenager broke off from the group, and approached Marquis. The kid’s cocaine-lit eyes peered into Marquis’s face. With his hands, the kid motioned to a small bag of white powder in his inner coat pocket. Marquis looked at him and thought, is this what was left for a black kid? Disgusted, Marquis shoved the kid aside and continued walking.
Eventually Marquis reached his house: a small, dirty-white ranch. Marquis fumbled with the lock, before opening the door. When he entered, his mom was sitting in the cramped living room, tears pouring down her face. Marquis’s heart sped up rapidly.
“What’s wrong Ma” sputtered Marquis.
His mom pointed to a letter lying on the tea table. “It’s from your director”
Apprehensively, Marquis picked up the letter. In bold lettering, the heading read “Congratulations on Your Acceptance to New York University Tisch School of Arts”. Marquis’s heart fluttered as he continued to read. Not only did he get accepted into one of the most prestigious performing art programs in the United States, Marquis got a full scholarship because of his financial circumstances.
A couple hours ago, Marquis’s entire life was going downhill. Acting was the only thing Marquis really had in life. It was the only thing he had pursued with honest dedication. When Marquis was cut from the play, it appeared as if the white man had taken acting from him too. 
America had always been touted as an exceptional country that upheld the dreamer and the hard-worker. As Marquis's mother put it, “The good guys always win here”. When Obama was elected President, Marquis believed in that idea. When Trayvon Martin was killed, Marquis questioned it.
A couple hours ago, Marquis had definite questions about American exceptionalism. Though with one simple letter, Marquis’s faith was strongly reaffirmed in the exceptional America and the beautiful dream it offered.

7 comments:

  1. Arnold this story really caught my attention. This narrative was very powerful, and touched upon racial issues that are very relevant today (Trayvon Martin, Obama). The profiling and prejudice of Marquis in the beginning was shocking enough, but when he received the acceptance letter from the college of his choice, I was shocked. Perhaps you could include a sentence in the beginning describing that Marquis applied there with little hope of getting in, or another sort of foreshadowing. Also, an elaboration of the rivalry between Keith and Marquis would be appealing. Marquis sort of already knew that he wouldn't land the main role, but is he more mad at the fact that Keith got it for his looks, or the fact that he didn't because of his race? Great job with this

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  2. This story was very gripping and I really enjoyed reading it. One thing I liked was that the reader can anticipate that Marquis will not be in the play, but his acceptance to NYU is a complete surprise. The 180-degree turn that the plot takes in this story is very representative of how people in America can turn their lives around. The referenes to Obama and Trayvon Martin were very relevant and well-placed. In the second to last paragraph, it's a little confusing as to whose mother said "the good guys always win here". To me, the descriptions of Marquis's neighborhood were a little excessive. Maybe take out the part about the "decrepit lock". The sentence "overreaction was inevitable" is unneccessary. You explained the reasoning behind his actions, and restating it at the end of the paragraph makes less of an impact. Awesome job!

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  3. Your story was a fresh new take on the topic; I liked how you used a scenario from everyday life that could be very relatable to some of us today. Great use of details and imagery. I really liked how you used the descriptions of Keith’s physical appearance (his blue eyes and silky blonde hair) to single out Marquis as the “different” one. I also liked how you addressed the idea of prejudice based on race, not based on merit. The plot twist is a nice way of representing the evident change in the attitudes toward colored people, especially with the part about Obama. I felt the ending was a little abrupt, considering the whole incident at the audition. But overall, I enjoyed reading your narrative!

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  4. Very intriguing story Arnold! You capture the mood and mindset of oppressed minorities in America very well by describing both Marquis' feelings and surroundings in great detail. The reference to current events really point out that events like this are very relevant in our society today. You use great detail in describing events and places that make the reader feel like he/she is actually there. The plot twist that you incorporate highlights the true value of the American dream - when Marquis' world seems like it is crashing down there comes a light at the end of the tunnel. The last paragraph about exceptionalism outright seems a bit forced - maybe elaborate on it using events from the story. The scene with the director trying to explain to Marquis could be expanded upon as well - you could use this as a transition period for Marquis' viewpoint on America. Overall great story my man!

    Side note: Glad you edited the dialogue we talked about...

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  5. Very interesting perspective on America exceptionalism, coming from the point of view of a minority in a financially difficult situation. The form of the narrative is very good, with rich, vivid details of the individual actors and of Marquis' emotions. While I think the story itself is fine, your conclusion at the end left me a little puzzled. I'm not sure if I completely agree with the notion of the "American Dream" and that America gives an equal chance to all individual's regardless of race. As you made evident in the narrative, minorities like Marquis are often time oppressed and left in poverty and the ending in a way allows the reader to ignore this. I personally would have been more critical of the American dream and exceptionalism in the conclusion of the sotry, but overall great work.

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  7. This is a great piece of work and I really enjoyed reading it! You drew me in right from the beginning with the line “Marquis waited in eager anticipation for the director to read the cast list.”; it made me interested to know how you were going to use this situation to express the idea of oppressed minorities bearing on the notion of American Exceptionalism. I appreciated your vivid descriptions of the characters, especially Keith with his “electric blue eyes”; it allowed me to picture each character in my mind as I read. One thing that I think you could improve upon is the transition between Marquis being upset about not being cast and his acceptance into NYU. This came up a little suddenly for me because I did not know he was applying for college or really wanted to go to NYU. Maybe you could include some more background information at the beginning and make the transition less abrupt? I also feel that the ratio between these two situations is a bit strange because the final idea of your piece is to express that America is exceptional, but this part of the paper is much shorter. Maybe you could shorten the beginning a little and add on to the end? Overall I enjoyed your piece, it is creative, engaging and was a pleasure to read!

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